24 hours.

by littlemissxsunshine   Jul 13, 2007


I've been sitting in the dirt.
I've forgotten my own worth.
I'm guessing you can't always win.
I can't have anything i want you say im just to young but its not my fault.
I'll find my own way home.
If I'm going to I'll make it all alone;;24 hours

I was in like 5th or 6th grade when i wrote this so i don't know what it means but i guess i did then..any comments?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Such the little genius at such a young age. I was writing at that age, too. I don't remember all of why either.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    Ok just a comment...i think line 4 needs to be broken up into more lines...it doesnt make sense as a run on..if you do that it will be much better. I didnt down vote cause I broke it up in my head and it would sound great that way..lol..if you need any advice about breaking it up just PM me. Keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    This is actually very good especially considering how young you were when you wrote it.

    Nice job!

    --Sher

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna

    Its very good....i think it is anways! =-)
    ttyl

    BabyGurl

  • 17 years ago

    by JiKaRiN

    Yes, I agree. You're born to be a writer.. C=

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