HAHA
Oh, I found this somewhat amusing =D
I love the way you wrote this, definitely has an effect on the reader, and it made me smile.

I'm sure i've read this before, have you re-posted it? Or have you wrote one similar? I definately remember reading one of our explicit poems which i found hilarious then i couldn't find it a few weeks later when i tried showing it to somone.
Anyway if it is the same one still made me giggle just as much as the first time round lol.
Brilliant p[oem!!
5/5

This was quite amusing to tell you the truth. An effective piece with a nice flow and great word choice. Something different and great. Really interesting to get the reader hooked with it. What more can I say to this then well done on writing such an entertaining explict poem.~mel

Hahaha! I love it! Simply amazing! I can really picture it in my mind ^_^ It was like watching a movie xD The opening stanza really grabs the reader's attention. And the ending was superb! ^_^ I love it *One of my Favorites*

A perfect 5/5!

Oh my freaking gosh...that was ..WOW..omg.. i loved it..it was amazing. you have talent just like you said in your profile...i think after reading this you might be in my favorites..lol. great poem!

~michelle~

...Oh.

I know for certain that I'm not allowed to read this particular theme. But I'm afraid I find it quite entertaining to read; in fact, the way you've written a lascivious and malevolent interaction in such a vivid, humorous approach humored me exceedingly. Its technical aspects are above reproach...Fantastic...Amusing to say the least. Keep on writing what you feel and like, hehe. I hope you all the best and take care. 5/5 ~Marian

LOL very good! Made me laugh, but also just written very well!! Honestly... IDK how you even go about writing a poem like that... so well done! Keep writing... your poem was very entertaining... and well... now I definatly plan on reading more of your work! Take care :-)

I think the same a Marian, I'm not supossed to read these kind of things. ^_^ But I really could laugh at this =P Good job. =)

Later, I pull out the one eyed beast,
And push her head down south,
As she opens wide for the feast,
I shoot the magic in her mouth.

Wow hahahah lol * falls on the floor guffawing*

This is great great and I cant stop laughing. Wow nice , simply superb. Flawless and worth of 1000 comments. 5/5 all the way. tc

Just correct the spelling of "than/then"

Tc

Haha, how incredibly...NOT sexy. This is funny and unexpected. 5/5 for effort!

I thought it was really good.. Although i dont normaly read these kinds of poems. Anyway keep up the great work and this is going to get a 5/5 from me becaue i thought it was that funny!

Hahahahaha what a detail , lol

exellent job as everyone else said, you are right, u got a mad skill with pencil,lol.

Lmfao that was hilarious i know its a serious poem but that was skilled man top marks!! lol

Oh wow. i dont usually like explicit poems, but this one was nicely done, poetically. the only thing i think you should fix is the word thee. to me it's just random. use another word if you want.
5/5.

[[ps i saw that you were on and decided to check out one o your poems.]]

That's def. funny ...and so true to how a lot of people feel. i love how it all flowed together so well too. good one.

Datz wat it do tell everybody else stop hatin on you and do yo thing Mz. Rubi Red

Good poem

Rofl that awsome.

That was quite an amusing poem. the flow was quite good and it definitely put a smile to my face lol

Many have said this was amusing. I have to say it was amazing and I'll PM you to tell you why. Haha!