World of War

by Synh   Jul 13, 2007


*Before you read this, I did recently submit this poem to UC for a poetry contest on April 14, 2010. I DID NOT STEAL THIS POEM. I just wrote it a long time ago and chose to use it in the scholarship contest.

Lying on the ground, we watch the stars
Unaware of how sad they are
Then I wonder why God lets us stay
When we kill one another everyday

Far away, on the other side
Lives a world where people die
Created by lies, guns, and hate
It leaves me in a sickly state

I wonder if I could one day show
The world their fate, or perhaps they know
Do you think they'll one day begin to see
That they're singing to a toxic melody?

As the wind blows through the trees
I close my eyes to a cool night breeze
And as the world struggles to survive
I wonder why I'm still alive

I look at you as you watch the moon
And wonder if you're worried too
Do you think that we'd get the chance
To save the world from its deadly trance?

And as the clouds consume the sky
I keep myself from wanting to cry
I lay down and begin to dream
Of what one day the world could be

*Dedicated to all the souls who lost their lives during any and every war...

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  • 17 years ago

    by Leah20

    I actually liked this poem. I liked the message conveyed, and the way you conveyed it. The only thing I could see where an improvement could be made is maybe in using stronger adjectives on your next poems, it definently adds another dimension to poetry.

  • 17 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    This is really a cute poem and the meaning and the content is great. I would say this is your best work :)

  • 17 years ago

    by X2892

    I like the imagery created in this poem, good job
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I really like the opening line of the poem, I like the imagery created in this poem, good job. It flowed nicely, good choice of words.

    That they're singing to a toxic melody?
    ^^I really like that line, well done.

    Keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Do you think they'll one day begin to see
    That they're singing to a toxic melody?
    [[I Love the toxic melody part.]]

    And excuse me, but damn.
    So much truth and emotion in one poem; brilliant!
    I love how you penned this. I could feel you telling it to me like a story, and almost crying near the end. Crazy.

    Anyways.
    I LOVE that the first and last stanza were my favorites. That's like 1000 points right there. They were so strong and held a lot of truth; nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

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