Good poem..vivid and compeling...thank you for sharing....5/5 vote and comment on my latest "I am" " My Doubts" "gifts of sorrow"

Wow this is very good. it's a different type of poem, so i like it a lot. theres is not something everyone writes about ,it's original so great job for that! it flowed nicely. 5/5

~Kristina

Do you think they'll one day begin to see
That they're singing to a toxic melody?
[[I Love the toxic melody part.]]

And excuse me, but damn.
So much truth and emotion in one poem; brilliant!
I love how you penned this. I could feel you telling it to me like a story, and almost crying near the end. Crazy.

Anyways.
I LOVE that the first and last stanza were my favorites. That's like 1000 points right there. They were so strong and held a lot of truth; nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I really like the opening line of the poem, I like the imagery created in this poem, good job. It flowed nicely, good choice of words.

That they're singing to a toxic melody?
^^I really like that line, well done.

Keep up the good work!

I like the imagery created in this poem, good job
5/5

This is really a cute poem and the meaning and the content is great. I would say this is your best work :)

I actually liked this poem. I liked the message conveyed, and the way you conveyed it. The only thing I could see where an improvement could be made is maybe in using stronger adjectives on your next poems, it definently adds another dimension to poetry.