Great poem i really like it 5/5

You repeate yourself alot in the poem. which could take away from the depth of it if you did it any more. but you didn't so good work :)

i think you should break your last line up for it seems to go on for 3 or 4 lines which made me a bit uninterested in reading itt. but the lay out of the poem was good :)

keep up to good work :)

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good luck on your poems :)