You have forbodding talent.
Cliche topic, but your talent shows through..
I really hope you're alright, but consider this:
If you want to write, do it so it's not cliche and your poetry shall aspire so much more..

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I love that last stanza sounds like ur telling a stroy as old as time...the poem itself was wonderfully written, though very sad, great job

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