This is great, story-like i like that you might wanna put more of them into stanzas but thats just me u write amazingly good job

laura

Wow..long but so very good aswell..
you sure can write so very good:D
5/5 for me
hope to read plenty more soon!!
keep it up
bree x

Again flow wasn't quite there, but i loved it. the story is great, and i think you captured the emotion within the piece. the end stanza definitely ties it all together, a very strong ending. good job. 4/5

The ending was amazing...Very good..5/5

Such lovely words! :) It makes me smile. I'm sure everyone can relate to this.

:)