Good poem and well varied language choice xxx

It was great. it was nicely penned. the way you worded the whole thing just made the words melt together to create such a strong picture in my mind. great work. 5/5

Nicely writeen, gr8 flow and the it all seemed to go together was gr8:D
the language choice was also good for this piece of writing:D
keep up the gr8 writes
tk care
breex

There are so many fantastic images and emotions swirling throughout this piece. I like the semi-rhyming pattern and the style and structure of this piece. You've expressed the emotions very well. A great piece.

Peace,

Grey Ajurahck

This was great..... you really made it flow! i felt almost like i was the girl, your use of imagery was fantastic!

love always
lauren

Great poem! I liked the ending two lines and how they were repeated from the beginning.

Now only pain runs through my veins
Explicit, definite, and terrifying pain
^loved these lines, not really sure why, but i loved them :]

I enjoyed that! I'm gonna definately read some more from you Viola!
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Ciao

Wow..amazing poem..

This is really good, i mean it. xoxo

Okay. i frikken loved this. the imagery you portrayed in this was beautifully done, it created very vivid pictures in my mind. flow was home throughout the whole piece, and i liked the repetition you used, it made for a powerful effect to the whole piece.

I loved the descriptive nature of this poem

I like this, it flows very nice. ^^ I really injoyed reading it ^^ 5/5

Really coool poem good on ya x