I really liked this! I loved how you used the whole dialect thing.. that was a nice touch. And the rhyming was clever and witty, without being forced. Plus, you had some good ideas in there. Brilliant poem.

Thank you very much, that means a lot to me that you liked it. I was just trying out the dialect thing, since one of my favourite poems is written in that way (A Black Country Account of the First Christmas, you could probably find it if you googled it), so I'm glad you find it effective.

Em xxxxxxxx

This was an amazing poem!!
I loved it, it flowed great, and you chose great words, I was hooked from the first line.
I really wish I could write like that!!!!
:)
~onyx
PS im an athiest