Oh wow that was simply beautiful, I like the rhyming of the poem. I find the whole piece to powerful, good job.

Time takes its tow in slow motion
^^I really adore this line.

You deserve a 5/5!

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Very nicely written poem... I love the word choice and imagery... you a very good writer and i look forward to reading a lot more of your work! 5/5...

I agree 100% that the world is becoming more and more terrible everyday, and there's absolutely nothing we can do about it. Excellent poem with great flow and word choice 5/5 GG23

Wow very deep i love the transition and i can relate totally 5/5 could you read my newest poem

Wow...i loved this poem...and i can understand where you're coming from.

"People always letting each other down
Watching as a smile turns to a frown
Life is lead in dismay
So what to this would the world say?"

this stanza is so true......life really is lead in dismay and the world is a complete mess sometimes...and u want so bad to escape because you think things cant get better... i know because i have felt like this but it always turns into something good..so hopefully the same happens to you...

great poem!

Well written poem, i like it alot n also u had a nice flow threw the whole poem, now this is better then most poems i have read, well 5/5 :-)

This was heartbreaking to read and yet beautifully written at the same time...the ddepth and emotion behind the words are easily sensed by the reader.
The imagery you painted was beautifully done, the flow was good for the most part, however at times I thought it was a little shaky.
Apart from that however, I thought this was a beautifully written piece.

I thought it was very good and I don't understand why you have a 4.7-4.8 on it lol I gve it a 5/5, nothing felt forced everything just flowed perfectly.

In this one seemed force on the rhyming, and not to fond of the rhyme sheme but still good. Strongly worded and I still think it should get a 5/5 !!!

My plea soon becomes my avow
[[I think you just mean "vow", not "avow".]]

"Please Lord let me die"
I was left there without a reply
"I just want to get away"
[[Please Lord let me die{,}"
and
I just want to get away{,}"]]

Why is the world so cruel
It's like fighting a duel
[[Not bad, but really cliche rhyming.]]

Now this is a poem, my girl. I'd stick with aabb rhymes for you; they seem to pop out more, for some reason.
Okay. You caught my attention. I'm not sure why, but whatever you did differently keep it up. I felt emotion; maybe that's it. Emotion is imporant in a poem; it helps the reader /understand/.

Now, I really liked the repeative ending. It worked nicely here. Well done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Great poem! very moving.. check out some of mine?

Nice..you did a good work..5/5 for it ..well do comments for me too...

Ok, well this is pretty good
but at parts it seems
the rhyming was a little forced
and in some places if you were to switch the words aroud a little it might sound better

4/5

This poem is fantastic. Topic is great and the ending is very effective. You wrote this piece excellently. Fourth and fifth stanzas are my favorite ones.
Well done!

I believe that as of now, I keep repeating myself due to the fact that I'm running out of words. But forget about that, I find this piece to be flawless and quite interesting. The emotions were expressed quite nicely and I really like it.

Amazing the atmosphere was great. Every line was as touching as the other. Excellent job, thanks for the read. Keep it up.