Comments : Shoebox memories

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessie

    This is once again; amazing!!!
    It was so sad *tear*
    and the ryhming did NOT suck it was good !
    I liked the third stanza the best.

  • 17 years ago

    by Angela

    Good flow... and beautiful all around!!
    this poem is really heart felt.. and thats what counts.. its also very well written, which is a bonus

  • 17 years ago

    by Spirit

    So it is like you are dead and you are watching her cry over pictures of you right? oh well i'm sure that i'll get it great poem you are full of potential (sp)
    5
    :~)Sam

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    Looking through this box of notes,
    A tear falls and lands on your cheek,
    As I reach to wipe it away,
    I hear your voice and the words you speak,
    ^^^
    Awww this part is so touching and really makes one wipe a tear. I can see the tear fall upon the page as you gently begin to wipe it away and ... a voice speaks to you from afar .... Fantastic imagery created.

    Very unique title .... and you create such touching imagery!

    I have gone back to check your age .... I can not believe you are only 16. I have a son who is 16 and can't imagine him writing love poetry as touching as this ....
    Excellent read! You have great potential dear heart .... keep up the wonderful writing.