Really nice poem...i loved the rhyming sceme in it....the flow was perfect and definately wasnt forced.....and even though i didnt read the first one, this one was great...i think i might read the first one...=] good poem 5/5

Last stanza is strong and full of anger and the want for revenge. However, I think the first part of this poem flowed better than this one did, except for, of course, the last stanza. Great job, regardless. :)