Unreal

by Corruption   Jul 17, 2007


So unreal,
everything,
nothing is here
gone,
vanished.
but one light,
by itself,
alone.
but bright
guides me,
helps,
saves.
brings me,
to salvation
to one girl.
the girl,
I dreamt of,
in the dark.
while alone.
thank you,
my savior.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    It is short but very effective, like some thoughts in your mind, it has good flow and it is original. It isn't classic love poem which is great. Rhythm is superb in this one, it deserves 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    AWE! keekee! this poem is absolutely beautiful! i loved it so much!It was well writen on top of many other things that made me like it! well... great job!<3
    -Haii

  • 17 years ago

    by shadowlight

    This is a very well written peice, simple yet very effective. it's flow is flawless and the sort lines are very effective.

  • 17 years ago

    by Dying Beautifully

    Hey Keenan I really like this one it's soo different than what you normally write... I think it's great!!!

    Beck

  • 17 years ago

    by Alissa

    Keenan, this is a really good poem. I love how it's different from most of your poetry. I like the flow, it was flawless and your vocabulary was great!!
    keep it up keenan;)

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