Very creepy.. I like the way you write this poem with so much imagination and powerful description...

Giggling silently he tiptoes on.
Not a single thought of mercy.

I really like this two lines.. dark and haunting... Great poem! :)

That was a horror poem. it was very creative took a lot of imagination. it was a very great poem its like you were the poem! 5/5

"knifes" is [knives] A few of the rhymes were a little off. Anyway, besides those two things, this was a great poem. Such a wonderful vocab, which I love to see. It was so vivid and descriptive too. I'll give you a 5/5.
Great write!

marcella

I thought parts of it the flow was off but overall it was a lovely piece :)

A very beautiful description of a dark poem. I LIKE IT. The way words are put together it makes it a real cohesive and coherent poem. You have nicely elucidated your nightmare. 5/5

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Lovin' it too.. I can imagine how scary it is...

Wow, you write so powerful dark poetry, I'm adding you to my favorite authors list. Another one with amazing wording and atmosphere. My favorite stanza is:
-Ascending out of lifeless room,
Gasping at life, corpse is shaking.
Dropping the knife; sight unsteady,
Our corrupt master is now awaking.-

I truly like everything about this piece, it's flawless.

Wonderful descriptions and detail in this piece. They made for really great imagery. Nice rhymes and a flawless flow as well. The ending was great too. 5/5

marcella