Rhythm is almost perfect. You have several typing errors and such in this poem.

and i dont know how youll take this, but i think of jump ropes rhymes while reading this, which really isnt a bad thing. =]

i hope that didnt sound harsh or anything.

Nice Poem..I Like It...

A good poem.
I can feel the emotions you put into this poem.
Enjoyed reading it.
Take care

Thanks so much i means so much to me