Good use of words, umm i didnt give it a 5 cause there wasnt as much emotion brought out as i thought could have been, but still and excellent poem

This is pretty good

Beautiful

Wow.. gr8 poem!!
keep it up!!!
good job!!
4/5
=D

Not as much emotion as some of your others, but still nice never the less. Even though there wasn't much emotion used, I could still tell how much pain you were in by the use of your words.
Good Stuff.

Emotional

OH..yeah!.. like what my poems are.. ^^, realy great job..!!....and i can relate myself here......i think its better if you used emotional terms...and long lines...just my opinion. ^^, keep it up....

5/5

I liked the way your lines were short, it made it flow better. Good work!