by Rose not your average Jul 19, 2007
category :
Life, society /
about society
What does it do for you? |
This is very deep and powerful, fulled with emotions. I like the way you wrote it, I could feel your emotions in every stanza, and you used punctuation greatly. This is my favorite one from you. The topic is good, too. |
by Nix
Very interesting poem. It is too similar with first part but atmosphere in this one is excellent too. I don't like some lines but except few words this poem is great. |
This one caught my eye i liked it i know where you are coming from cutting is pointless...trust me...i know....always Manda |
by Riley
I think the rhyming is a bit rushed with the aabb pattern, I think this poem would flow very nicely if you changed it to the ABAB pattern. |
A bit cheesy, lol. But I like it. The thing is people don't cut because they want to die and it doesn't mean they want to commit suicide. They just want to release some of the pain they're in. No one want to die, only to escape immense pain. |