Wow great imaginary and flow a vivid poem and a smooth one yet its effective i love the rhythem great piece keep up...

The poem is good.. However I realize that you change from second to first person in the poem.. be careful of that.. But other wise its a good poem

Very intence and vivid!!! Good rhyme scheme. good

Very good

Wow... scary! good detail and nice wording! haha, wow! you got my vote for sure!

Wow, that was really good. It showed so much emotion. It was short but amazing. Good job! 5/5

~Kat~

Kind of an amateur poem, but you are only fourteen and that's about how I was writing. I only have two years on you, but that's a lot of you practice enough. Explore words, try different styles. I can see stunning poetry coming from you with a little more experience and experimentation. Read the dictionary, maybe. It's a bit interesting actually.

You wish it were all a dream!

Should be was, I think.

The rhymes were pretty simple, but they did rhyme, so that's always good when that's what you're going for. There wasn't a lot depth, I think thats the word I'm looking for lol, it's just the poem is pretty straight forward. Um, overall it's a pretty good poem. Keep it up!

marcella

Good job, I like the rhymes in this one, it flowed nicely, everything fit togettherr. 5/5

It was good, not brilliant or the best i've read, i think it was too simple, not enough vivid wording, couldnt really get a picute, there wasnt much emotion for me. But overall it was a good poem.
love Tara-Kay
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Whoa! Dark poem. lol I felt that the flow was off in a few places and some of the rhyming was off too but not a bad poem at all.
4/5
Ciao

I loved the imagery here, but I found that some of the rhyming was forced. It was good none the less. Keep it up :)

The imagery was great...When you write you should let the rhymes come out not like forced..It was really well writen though..Good JOb

5/5

Wow. the imagery was powerful and the whole piece was powerful. i loved every single word of it. nice one

I really couldn't get a picture from this the imagery lacked. The flow was just alright though the rhyme seemed forced in some areas. I like the meaning you portrayed behind this piece but to me this was too simple. Overall 3/5

The flow was good and I loved the meaning of this poem.You shouldn't press the rhyming as much though.All in all it was a pretty good poem.

<3Amber

I liek the thought behind it but the rhyme scheme is to simple for me I know its readers preference but I like more meat in the lines I wanna feel the fear I want to hear the birds you know but good framework on it