Good rhyming it wasnt forced and good rhythm. I especially like the 1st stanza where u were talking about staring into his eyes. That was deep good job!!!

It gave me a great vision it had an awesome flow i loved it good job!

Hmm.. Fair Poem, I especially like the second stanza.

Not too bad, but very cliche. I hate cliche.
However, the rhymes were clean and the flow well. Just stay out of the cliche.
And use punctuation; it helps the flow of the poem sooo much. You'd never believe me.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

Wow, that was very powerful. the rhyming came naturally, and didn't sound forced, and the flow was great. i think my favorite stanza was the second one. great job. 5/5

Wow! I'm speechless! This is amazingly written dark poem, with so powerful imagery and wording.
Every stanza is just great, and the atmosphere in the whole piece is very haunting. Great job, 5/5.

I loved the ending you used in this, I found it to be very intense and hardhitting, a stunning end to such a beautifully written piece.
Flow is good throughout and imagery painted was nicely done.

I liked this poem although again I found it to be cliche. The flow was spot on though and It didn't rock at all. The imagery was vivd and great I truely loved that about this piece. None the less a good effort but not the best i've read by you today. ~mel

Good poem with nice rhymes written consecutively. Creative and a good attempt. :)

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This poem is superb. You wrote it excellently. Topic is interesting and atmosphere of this piece is great. It really deserves 5/5

This piece is great yet I'm not that impressed. I'm expecting more than this. Nevertheless, the flow was great and quite imaginative. Worth a try.

Wow, the emotions the imagery such a heartfelt piece. Great work you put into it. Amazing job.