Defeat in Dying

Wow. The emotion was really strong here. Beautiful peice, although the flow was off you still portrayed your emotions perfectly and you kept my attention!
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

Keenan, omg this poem, this poem is so strong.
Omg keenan, wow i'm shaking, wow. I can feel your emtion, it's so strong and raw and it's reaches out to you. It's so scary, you did a great job in showing your emotion!!

Keenan,

Ok this is what I am thinking and so yeah here we go...

Death is not that interesting...It is a cheap man's way out (women too!!) You would be giving in if you did that and well you aren't a quitter so Don't give up I am here for you if you need me ok?

If you feel like noone care's think about it this way...you kill yourself you dead no comming back..your funeral..I would be there so would teri and Blake and Everyone that even knows your name and people you don't even know that know you through people that care about you enough to say all the nice and true things we do...So people for maxville would be there, School people would be there, friends and family all of us who have ever thought of you for one minute.

You are here for a reason and it's not to kill yourself noone is here for that ok? People know how people die and we don't need more of it people die everyday because of a multitude of things that could of been prevented so why be a statistic when you could be something more in life like a dear husband or great father you already are the best friend someone could ask for so why stop now?

And I know that this seems really really fake but Keenan as a past girlfriend and buddy someone who has had thoughts like this I am not lying and never would to anyone who means anything to me like you do ok? So put up your chin and smile and know you are loved and cherished and needed ok? Muah We Love you..I love you never leave ok?

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Anyone who read's this just know that I have been suicidal and it's true it is a cop out ok?? Have something to say abou that then tell me so...

Beck
p.s. Great job Keenan

:(
i like ur other peom better this one to sad
but it is a really good poem
good job

ashleigh