Towards the ending the rhyming didn't flow as well as the beginning, but otherwise good flow throughout the piece.
Cause I know this pain can't mend... the flow seems to break here, so maybe try Cause I know this pain isn't able to mend.
just a thought. the power behind the piece suggests that you went through this or you know someone very close who did. i hope everything worked out. good piece. 4/5

I really enjoyed reading this piece!! This touched me deeply....and has made me speechless....
Great job!!

Wow, really deep, and so very sad. I love the way you made the sadness is this poem scream out, beautiful. xx