Well i thoguht it was very good
i loved the general idea
and the rhyming was pretty good
but in a place or two it seemed a little
forced

but it was still good
and had a nice flow

"My heart and soul; you are my world,
Yet our relationship has become a tad twirled.
What happened to the boy that I once knew?
The one who said "Beauty is inside of you."

Favorite stanza ^^

5/5

I liked it...It was deep...And written so beautifully....The vocab was just right and the flow was flawless through out the whole thing...

The ending was right to the point...

This poem had a great story behind it...Enjoyable read..

Overall Rating- 5/5 =)

Well, I'm glad you posted it.
It's quite amazing, dear.
I mean, I absolutely love it.
The flow was amazing, the rhyme was greattt, and the poem was oustanding.
No critque whatsoever on this, I absolutely love it. :]

I wish I could give you more than a five, eh.
Keep it up.

Awww it's sad and cute and emotional all at the same time ^_^ It reminds me of those best friend relationships that get into boyfriend-girlfriend relationships and then are ruined. -sigh- Ah well.

The flow was perfect! I loved every word pieced together. And the vocabulary was great. It went well with the kind of poem you wanted to portray. Very well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Aweh, I`m glad you did post this. This is great, really sums about half the male population whose brains are in their hair and biceps, love it.

5.5
:]