A Spotless Mind

by Bethan   Jul 21, 2007


A spotless mind,
A unique find,
One unhindered
By depth of time,

Soulless, living,
Loving, dead,
A hardened soul,
A heart of lead,

A paradox,
Jumbled thought,
Unorthodox,
Learning naught,

Unhindered Mind,
Lost within,
An empty shell
Purged of sin.

(still a work in progress as I don't feel done with this yet but any feedback would be helpful!)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Aryaan

    So far so good. Keep writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by katy

    I liked this one but as u noted working in progress i think mayb you should add a bit more detail into your poem but very good writing so far xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I liked the short stanzas, and they all flowed nicely, but there just didn't seem to be much information.

    Brad

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