I like, I like =]!! And the last line, is really powerfull. "this is the end goodbye for now, the question that replays is why and how?"
One thing, maybe you should try to do it in stanza's.. instead of 1 "story" =] Well.. if you don't want to, don't, cause it's good the way it is too ^^
If you have the time, could you read and comment one of my poems too ^_^
- 5/5
xxx

Love it!!!!

<3Amber