Friendship forever lost

by crystaljean88   Jul 22, 2007


A friendship will be forever lost,
I'm not sure why,
but my heart was the cost.

we was in love once,
then it fell through.
so you said "lets be friends".
feeling crushed inside i said that would have to do.

there was a time you held my hand,
helping me get through life.
but now you are nothing but rude,
and tell me i have no life.

why does it has to end this way?
it was true but now forever gone.
our friendship you put on delay.

i know we will never have what it once was,
our friendship will be forever lost.
i don't understand the reason,
the friendship froze over like frost.

~this poem don't flow right and i know this. but i wrote it out of emotion and i really didn't bother trying to make it go right. i just wanted to get my feelings out~

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  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    It was really good, I'm glad you put that at the bottom, it doesn't need to be perfect, just get out how you feel because you need to.

    "there was a time you held my hand,
    helping me get through life.
    but now you are nothing but rude,
    and tell me i have no life."

    That was the only thing that you used life twice, but it was really good, you don't need to perfect it. it was great.

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    I liked how you added the note on bottom, sometimes its crucial to realize that poems aren't being written to be perfect but instead they're being written out of need. This is what makes poem like these so pure because they're so heartfelt and created out of pure emotion.

  • 17 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    All i can say is that you have putted a lot of your emotions in this one and i really appreciate it 'coz i can feel the vivid emotions, such as the gloom and torment that you're bearing.. but honestly, this poem will look more beautiful if you just make the flow and the setting more fix though i can get the point and i can see the picture in it (but not so clear).. good work!! hope i didn't offend you.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna

    This piece is powerful and sad...i hate when guys say lets be friends...your emotions were definently expressed beautifully. keep it up hun!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Gizmo

    The emotion is powerful :]

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