by Marius Laun Jul 23, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
As I fall |
by JustKristina
I liked this one but some of the rhyming seem sort of forced.. but other than that it was really enjoyable to read!!! keep it up! :o] |
by Yvonne
Wow! Good poem. The flow is good and the passion is right there! It has so much emotion that you can feel it all the way through the poem. Great job! |
The message was evidently a fact and I agree with every word said. |
by Nix
I don't like last stanza. This poem is amazing. Topic and message of this piece are great. It is unique and excellently written. |
by Alissa
This was a great piece of art, the flow to this one was flawless just like the rhymes. You did a fantastic job, yet I would like to mention that you should place punctuation in your work, i find that...poetry without punctuation is like a song without a melody. I have learned that on this site, I hope my advice is of any help. I think that you are a great writer, keep writing! |