Yeah good poem xxxx keep writing xxx take kare hun xxx

Hello ^.^
I like the topic that you chose to write about, but I didn't feel that much emotion. If you chose different words, then maybe that would help, but I dunno, that's just me. I think that another thing that would help, is if you put this poem into stanzas. You don't have too though.
Other than that, don't change a thing ^_^ Keep it up, 4/5

With all due respect,
Hatori

P.S. If you get a chance, could you please RRC one of my poems?
Thanks! ^.-

I like it because i can relate to to it i give you 4/5

A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG!