"tear" are you the love child of Shakespear by any chance?
you should start printing them out into some sort of book or something. i'd buy it.
love you
~tim

A really, really good piece. I would've given it a 5/5, but I only give those out to the absolute exceptional poems. By far, the stanza I love the most was the second. There's something about words like 'Thou' and 'Thus' that are so very appealing to me, as well as the way you've toyed with the stucture of each line in that stanza. I loved that stanza to bits! Well bloody done!

Brad