This poem is good...the story behind it is amazing...but im going to give you a few tips that i think will help you make this one better..

"I gave you my heart
But you tore it apart
Your not the person i thought you'd be
I thought you loved me"

^^ this part is perfect..the rhyming was right on key....

"All the times you said you loved me,
Was that just a lie?
Now i stay up late in the night,
And all i do is cry."

^^that part is different from the first stanza.. the rhyming was different...in this part the second and fourth lines rhymed.and in the first stanza the first and second rhymed and then the third and fourth.

"Thought you were the one for me,
I guess i just couldnt see.
Been together all these years,
No im sitting here in tears."

^^this part is has the exact same rhyme sceme as the first stanza...and in the last line "no" should be "now"

and the fourth stanza had a completely different rhyme sceme from every part of the poem....

maye you should revise this and stick with one poetry form and rhyme sceme...

you said you were new at writing so im just trying to help...but you are a great writer .. you just needed a little advice.=]

I liked this poem alot.. i enjoyed it very much. i know the feeling.... i rate this a 5

Nice poem. you do need a little help on the rhyme sceme just like i think i do but i still like it very much.

Ryhming is okay.. but i love the poem and the thought behind it :)
very nice
keep it up
<3 ang

The ryhme sceme could use some work.
But the poem was still could.
The flow was a little off, but that can be fixed:)
I didn't really like the ending,
but I did enjoy reading this.
The behind it was meaningful.

Keep writting,
You'll get the ryhming down:)
Elaine. 4/5

Very well written, very nice portrayal of emotions, great flow. Well done, keep up the good work :)

Aw this is a sad poem =[ it's well written though

Good job. keep it up. i know exactly what this is saying im kinda going through the same thing.

Thats a very good poem..Its writen well..Its almost perfect..Keep up the wirting your doing great..CAnt wait to read more...

xxASHLEYxx

Great piece, such strong emotions, I really liked the opening lines really eye-catching. Great work. Keep it up.

Hey great poem i really like it your poems are great keep it up kk

xXx3mzxXx

Great job. Easily related to but i do agree with some prior people. Work on your rhyming and you'll do even better. Keep writing. =)
~ Lainey