Good work. The rhymes are great but you can make it better by making the strcuture better. When lines are short It would be more attractive.

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Fsams

Beautiful!
The emotion was extremely strong, and I loved the flow and it all the peiced together quite perfectly.
Your wording and vocabulary also made a rather large impact on the deepness of it all.
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

I loved it. Really really loved it. It was so different, so captivating. You did an amazing job, deary!