Wow that was such a great poem i really liked it the situation transition and feeling 5/5

Nice one

Your heart would be weakened not weekend. .
two different meanings, and not bye but simply by. Your writing is pretty simple and your rhymes are plain. Try to add more to what you are writing and really make the reader feel what you are reading, use a thesaurus and use change up the words you do, and try harder rhymes.

Nice rhythm, can say that I like it. 5/5

I really really like this poem.. i love the rhyming.. prolly cause im not much of a rhymer.. lol its very good.. Great Job.

"you stood bye to watch us cry,
than you ask why,
and we lie,
just to see u smile in denial,
as i do often to you,"

I liked this poem. You've done a good job on it
5/5
*Gem*

WOw! Brillant write. Great imagery though. 5.5