The Dark Room

Hey man dis poem is actully gud dude....man ......hope u havnt copied it frm sumwhere...

"Shallow corners , congested emotions
forgotten days , memory erosions.
Like an empty casket , where thoughts lie in the fray
is the dark room where i stay"

Thats deep, i rly like it though. great job

.:Katelyn:.

Very effective poem, you expressed emotions greatly and created powerful atmosphere. I enjoy reading it, it has some great and dark tone. Well done! 5/5

Great poem, very powerful. I can relate to it. Your choice of words and metaphors in it are superb. The atmosphere that you created makes me read the whole piece over and over again. Very captivating.
My favorite stanza is:

-Shallow corners , congested emotions
forgotten days , memory erosions.
Like an empty casket , where thoughts lie in the fray
is the dark room where i stay-

The imagery is also great, very vivid.
5/5 from me
Keep writing!

Hehe Can't get a poem darker than this eh? ^_^ Dark room huh? Hmm The dark is fun to play in with the shadows but can be very lonely and cold with that bare floor. Maybe I can rescue you from that dark room where you stay?? Hehe I always love reading your poems. You got my taste in poetry ^_^ And I always love hearing your comment they make me smile. 5/5 Wonder poem :)