Shooting star

by Rose not your average   Jul 27, 2007


Sitting there in that sand,
It is so grand.
You look up in the sky,
You will not cry.
The sight is amazing,
It was blazing!
Blazing with stars,
You think you may see mars.
It puts a smile on your face,
It is suck a beautiful place.
The stars shine so brightly.
Then you see one fall,
It looked so small.
It was a shooting star,
It fell so far.
Make a wish!
You close your eyes,
Wishing upon that shooting star

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  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Beautifully written, very sweet.
    You should make one correction ( you have small typing error) the word "suck" in the tenth line should be "such". The line -You think you may see mars.- is somehow out of flow, but the rest of the poem is really good.
    Keep up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Captured Beatifully:D.

    I thought I was sitting there watching it myself!
    Truly a magical write.
    So Rose.. What did you wish for?;)

    Well done,
    Elaine.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bre Monique

    You look p in the sky [up]
    The starts shine so brightly [star]

    Other then those two small mistakes I loved it ~The imagery just takes you to that place ~ Keep up the great work ~

  • 17 years ago

    by Mandz and Aly

    Not my favorite but very good poem..always Manda

  • 17 years ago

    by yoyi

    I love it no other words just a beautiful poem :P

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