I wont say that this is a bad poem because the flow and the wordings are clear. But there is still room for improvement like correcting the spelling mistakes and adding more rhymes. But I will still give you5/5
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Fsams

Like Coolio much? I liked the meaning behind this poem I felt the emotion which you portrayed was quite deep and heart wrenching. The only thing I think you could improve is your grammer, and structure. Overall an interesting piece which I did enjoy reading. Keep up the good work. ~mel