Stripped Bare.

by Teria   Jul 27, 2007


Stripped Bare.

A million miles away lies a dreamer on the ground,
forgetting what he's lost as his bodies never found.
A dead soul, a broken heart, and a lost soul eating away
at the flesh upon the ground rotted by the sun today.
But, as night turns over the smell reaches the town,
and a million miles away lies a dreamer on the ground.

It seems as if he's lost, fallen from another dimension,
with one word written across each body part; fiction.
Since, that's what his life was based on- - lies upon lies,
and, he lost his sense of humor with those silent nightly cries,
The ones that nobody heard each night -- he gave us an extension,
but it seems as if he's lost, fallen from another dimension.

His body lies at rest, upon high ninety-nine, stripped so utterly bare.
For, his ghost that haunts the night, left only his rotted flesh there.
The stolen clothes and handkerchiefs float through-out the town,
since, no one heard the silent nightly cries and no one came around.
The smell that makes them cringe it wonders through the air,
as his body lies at rest, upon high way ninety-nine, stripped so utterly bare.

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Title given by Kenneth. xD

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  • 17 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I really like it.
    itz eery.
    i felt goosebumps.
    :]]

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This poem was so dark and eery, which I loved.

    "A million miles away lyes a dreamer on the ground," -- shouldn't 'lyes' be 'lies'? I've never seen it spelled that way before.

    Something I loved was the repetition of each first line at the end of each stanza. It was unique and interesting, and gave the poem some diversity.

    Good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vincent Thornsberry

    I like it. i cant give any critique, but i think you should keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    Seems like it could use some more work with the flow. Try not to repeat words too much and try not to force rhyme; otherwise a good read with a good storyline, if you don't mind me calling it that. I'm at a loss for the word I'm thinking of.