Seems like it could use some more work with the flow. Try not to repeat words too much and try not to force rhyme; otherwise a good read with a good storyline, if you don't mind me calling it that. I'm at a loss for the word I'm thinking of.

I like it. i cant give any critique, but i think you should keep up the good work

This poem was so dark and eery, which I loved.

"A million miles away lyes a dreamer on the ground," -- shouldn't 'lyes' be 'lies'? I've never seen it spelled that way before.

Something I loved was the repetition of each first line at the end of each stanza. It was unique and interesting, and gave the poem some diversity.

Good job.

I really like it.
itz eery.
i felt goosebumps.
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5/5