I really really really liked this poem. I think that stanzas would be good for it, but overall you have a great poem going here.
Once again, oringal [[ in a great way]]
Keep it up.

I loved the mood you created in the beginning. It lured me in and made me want more. The love expressed here was one I could relate with. Well done *5/5*

Well for a first poem it was awsomly amazing! ur really good!