This was beautiful,
You expressed your emotions flawlessly.

Your use of words was interesting,
I liked this.

Wow, this was beautiful. It had a nice flow to it and you uses lovely vocabulary. The only thing that I found wrong was:

Slay me if I unable to bring happiness

Was I suppose to be I'm?

Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Hey...the poem is cleverly penned....emotions are pretty well conveyed..i am not all that good in double acrostics myself..but you've made it look simple yet graceful....well keep writing...=) on a personal basis...maybe u should go in for a better grl..yeah i know one falls in love only once in a lifetime...
anyways great job!
keep up the good work buddy!