by DAM Jul 28, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
WE STARTED AS SECRET LOVERS |
by yoyi
Hey nice poem i really like it :P good job |
by Tatiana
I like this poem its very niceee |
NICE |
by loviin hym
Beautiful love it |
I may be the only one but it needs work. I'm not being mean I'm trying to help you so don't get angery if I tell you what I like and what I don't like. Well first of all whenever someone uses all caps it's very distracting from the poem. It makes the person seem less professional along with not using correct spelling and so forth. Now since it's poetry yes you can go with tha insted of the it's ok that's just how you are I'm fine with that it's just not something I'm big on unless it's an excelent poem. I can see you're trying to show some visual images for the poem which is good it's just I'm very distracted from all of the capitalized font. I have no doubt that a lot of people like it an give you good rateings it's just not me though to give someone something good just for the attempt. You need to work on not using all of the capital letters along with using things like 4ever or something along those lines. I would asume that you've gotten so many votes in these short days from commenting people and asking for favors. Good strategy but I have to give you a 2. Good idea to show images, but the font is too distracting, the way you type it I'm not big on, and it seems kind of off. One line talks about hiding it from brothers and then it goes off into a completly different direction. It's choppy. I'm not insulting you I promise. I'm giving you my advice that you may choose to follow ony if you wish. |