Rage (Double Etheree)

by Debbie   Jul 28, 2007


His
rage had
no measure
as vicious flames
flittered and fluttered
in disdain. Flustered, I
recklessly danced my way to
ease the fury borne on his mind!
Yet Beauty's rose had withered and drooped
within the manger of his brittle heart.

O, solemn and infinite Universe,
What foolishness have I brought to life?
In disgrace ill-fate dimmed my path,
with listless flames sweltering
malice in my brazen
mind... Ah! Good Heavens,
may the stars blush
at his face
with rage-
Rage!

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The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of
1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables.
Etheree can also be reversed and written
10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
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  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Very powerful piece! you pulled it off perfect with that kind of form. Imagery was also amazing. And the ending.. I havent understood how powerful word is rage till now!
    Flawless
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    The easier a format is, the harder it is to make the poem sound poetic. But you pulled it off. You used great descriptions and limited the usage of "I" Nice job

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Well as always your poem amazes me. I really like the structure of the poem.. I love your choice of words.. ^_^

    O, solemn and infinite Universe,
    ^^ My favorite line.. ^_^

    btw I read this poem twice coz it was really beautiful.

  • 17 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Another awesome poem..you really have the talent of a poet and i admire you for that.. i enjoy reading on this one it was superbly wornderful, on how you keep the flow, the imagination and the meaning beyond.

  • 17 years ago

    by Leah20

    I have nothing to say, this poem is spectacular just like all the rest!

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