Too long and repetative. not your best piece but still, the value of what you write is worth high marks....good job!

Aww that's sad but sweet. great job. 5/5
-vino

I like the use of repetition in the poem ;) Just a suggestion to use punctuations it will really improve your poems. It flowed well =)

Now we are (split)
A suggestion.. change it to.. (apart)

Us together was in heaven whenever we was together
^^ That doesn't make sense to me.. sorry (maybe you need to rephrase it.)

We had a taste of heaven (Paradise)
We touched heaven
We stretched for heaven and got there as one
Us together was in heaven whenever we was together

^^ You repeated heaven 4 times xD I'm not saying it's good.. But I think it would be better if you try using different words =)

It (hasnt) from me = hasn't

And capitalize the I's =)

PS. Sorry if you don't like constructive criticism.

You may not change your poem if you don’t want to =)

Nonetheless.. It was a great poem. Keep up the fantastic work.

^^ You repeated heaven 4 times xD I'm not saying i(t's) = isn't good.. But I think it would be better if you try using different words =)
^^ Sorry for the typo

Thats a good poem

Katy, this is a very lovely poem sweetie =) You did a good job.. it was full of love, sadness, and painful memories of a broken relationship.
The only thing though, is that you need to clean it up alittle bit.. like you use "was" a lot when it should be "were". And you should add some periods at the ends of your lines =) It just makes the poem look a lot neater and it looks more professional..

Great job, please keep up the good work!

~Loveless Nights~

Amazing poem
The many emotions you portrayed really amazed me. It's sadly beautiful was written well.
Nice Job!!
-Taylore

5/5

I can relate i hate livng in the past but i do

anyways great job and keept it up i like this poem alot
5/5
laura

Wow that was really good.Long but really good!lol Keep it up i love your poems!

It sounds kind of like the situation i was in but hes just started coming back to me... great peom.
TheQuestioner
~Dollie~

Poems that are long tend to lose the readers attention after about thirty lines...just a bug in your ear there....

Well, you really need to change all of the was's to were.
The length was kind of long.
But I can feel your pain.
Great job!
4/5
XxAmberxX

I love this poem and I feel ur pain and loss for this person for as u read my poems so u know that I to have lost someone I love alot any how great flow and love it 5/5

I love this poem mainly because i can relate. I feel that you repeating lines emphasizes your feelings. keep writing 5/5

Good poem.
Little bit long.
How longer the poem how more people must do their best to keep their attention.
But besides that, I really like it.
Well done.
Take care

That was very beautiful and very full of emotion, but I think it was very long. I really enjoyed reading it. I have never read anything more beautiful. Very good write! Keep it up! Ill read some more of your poems!

~Mo~

Hey yeah nicely written hun....
bit long but however i liked it alot.. but if this is what went on in ya life let me just say this "ONE DOOR SHUTS AND ANOTHER ONE WILL OPEN"

so jus go with flow an ull move on in time

take care

This was a great poem, it just had a great flow :]

Really kute!!
i luv it