Comments : I Love You

  • 17 years ago

    by Jaime

    That was quite the statement you made there! Very clear, as well as strong. However, some parts of the poem seemed a little typical, for example the last stanza. A lot of love poems use those exact words, only slightly changed.

    "I never imagined that your words
    little by little began my heart to steal."

    ^I also thought those^ lines were a little awkward, they cause the reader to stop and think about exactly what you are trying to say. Just my opinion, but they seem a little confusing.

    Great effort on your poem, it seems you have found a good inspiration for your writing, and I'm sure you will be able to come up with many great poems.