I like your rhyming. and a nice flow too. It is intense and very deep. I like it!

Hey nice poem love the begining 4/5

HEllo this is a nice piece, yeah good rythem and flow great job
kababayan

Gene Ross

This is a good poem, that is written greatly, i dont know why would ppl give it low vote, cause it deserve better.

keep up the great job

Nice you did a good job..

Its a like alot of poems, but its still fantastic! if u get a chance try to check out some of my work!

I liked this poem, but the rhyming was a little off. i like the concept of it but the poem just didn't seem to be all it could be. the imagery was a little dull and the words were simple. i give you a 4/5.

Well it was a good poem, it doesn't deserve to be down voted.

Anyway I think to improve this I would suggest you to use punctuations and edit the 'weird' words = Iâ??ll
^^ Just edit it to remove the 'weird' words.

I'm lovin diz poem,like how u express urself, u have sum talent!

The piece didn't impress me. I was expecting more than just this. The choice of words were simple but unable to fully express the emotions. I can a lot room of improvement for this piece.

I can *see* a lot room of improvement for this piece.

Sorry..

I really liked this one, i dont know why people are giving low votes 5/5

I think ur poem was good keep up the good work iight

I really like this. i think the simple language suits and i like the flow of the piece.
Good job
DnB