by XxHow High Can You Fly With Broken WingsxX Jul 29, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I want to love but I cannot |
I like how you are trying to express these certain emotions/feelings inro your poem. But to me it seems a little to distorted, as in, the words and sentences dont really fit together, your ideas are randomly jamed in and I think it could be made more smoother. But I think you are on the way to making this poem really good. Good work |