I think this could have been better, but it was still an amzing poem had a good flow a little bumpy round the edges. |
by Teria
I really raelly really like this beautiful piece. |
by Mr M
Well, I thought this has real merit. A word of advice: if you are looking to publish some day, publishers do not want to see archaic language such as thee and thing. They will never publish it. Also a limit on large words like "pulchritudinous" that interupt the rhythm and you need a doctorate to fathom. |
by Fsams
I would consider this one a unique type coz it reflects some element of Shakespears style. Loved the way you put the HUGE words :) |
by TamborineMan
Hmm... I'm not quite sure what to make of this poem. The subject matter is somewhat vague. This is further complicated by the imagery you use - at times it doesn't relate to the theme and there aren't any foundations in previous lines to support them. In other words, although it might be clear to you what your symbolism and imagery are referencing, there isn't a precedent for the reader to connect with them - so the significance is lost. (for example 'to be touched by a thousand angels') |