Comments : Broken pieces

  • 17 years ago

    by Woe

    Wow. you have talent.. i like the short lines.. it makes it easier to read but it has so much feeling that it seems longer.. i love it 5/5 but again, punctuation makes all the difference, really...

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Loved it! I would just fix your first stanza so you've got the four lines instead of three to fit the rest of the poem. Other than that...beautiful!
    Charisma*