by AlaSkA
I liked this writes ideas, but im off on the AABB. |
by Angela
Ooomg!! you never cease to amaze me darlin.. i think is is actually my favorite one that you wrote now.. like wow.. how can you come up with this??.. do original really.. like your mind is sooo out there i love it |
by Fsams
Jenny, this is awesome, I felt the insanity in this piece. You have beautifully worded and the lexis is just the best. The words strung together are cohesive and really reflects poetic qualities. |
by Marius Laun
Bravo, this is an incredibly twisted piece of poetry. When I was reading this I could feel my mind Sort of in that state of insanity. It was very well written. |
I love ur use of metaphors. Very nice. It was so awesome and umm whats the wrd intense. yep thats it. n/e ways nice. 5/5 |
5/5. JUST AMAZING! This was just a insane piece and I really love the way its worded as well as ur rhyme scheme. |
by N J Thornton
Ok I'll start with the flow ;) lol it was good in this. The meter was fluent, much better than the other one (if you know what I mean.) |
I think it shows that no effort was put into a poem if they use baby words a lot like see and me. That's just me though. I like more structure. You and I are like the complete oposites on poetry. :) |
This poem was good expect it loses it's flow a little but and I, as a reader got turned off. I had to read it a few times to really enjoy what you wrote. Also some of the rhyming seems forced which always makes the poems flow drift off a bit. |
Sorry for those spelling mistakes, I rushed what I wrote because someone was calling for me. |
by Sumit Ojha
Really nice poem... I like it :D |
by ALEX
Sparks are shooting from my brain = good line, not everyone knows that happens. awesome. |
by tears i cry
Not you best but still pretty good it lacked a bit of flow for me 4/5 for well written but lack of flow |
by Jenni Marie
I love this...this was amazing. |
I really LOVE the first...eh... eight lines or so.. and then it went down hill and I lost complete interest. |
by GoodMEMORIES
It was really good at the beginning, but i think that the end was not so great for me. I think that the flow was kind off also |
by Trisha
:) Great poem. I love the flow and the word usage is nice... Good luck in future writing! |