It was awesome
But a lot of improvement neede and can easily be made
But since your main lang must not be english you try not to repeat words pay proper attention on verbs and make i to I
4/5 cos i want an improvement in you
Tc

Um i dont know why you would want critics stuff them ur great okay way ta go mwah love

lisa

I don't like last line in third stanza. I also don't like ending. Atmosphere is interesting and topic is very original. Second stanza is my favorite. 5/5

It was so sad and sorrowful but I have some things that you should change

din't=didn't
fell=feel

Capitalize the i's and the beginning letters

And it would be fine

Good job,
Laura

And again, a lovely poem. If you'd just mind your grammer a little bit more =] Other than that I like it.. and I think a lot of people have these feelings... =]
4/5

My eyes are open,
but i feel it's dark
my ears can hear,
but i couldn't hear the truth of sound

your this poem brought a tear from my eyes. what a nice and sad piece. it shows the pain. i felt the pain in this poem. and a tear flew away from my eyes. i am very happy after reading this pom
5/5

Nakakatouch talaga......very sad.......keep it up

Great Job =]]

This one holds so many emotions, and it's beautifully written, yet very sad. I love the wording in this one, and whole piece has very unique atmosphere.
Well done, 5/5 from me

Gnda ng message mo tsong =p!! malungkot tlaga xa... ayusin mo lng ng onti kc medyo kapos ung datng kc may mga mli ka...

It was good..I really enjoyed reading this one..Keep up the good work...

5/5

This was okay. There's quite a few mistakes, but the emotion is there and that's what I like. Sweet job.

Your a very talented writer well done
xx

Deep poem, You say alot in this poem, but it really needs to be clear, very mixed not going so well together, but it really is like an idea for something bigger, but that is only my opinion! :)
I really enjoyed for the emotion set so good!
5/5

This poem was very deep, it expressed emotion's some of us just burry deep inside.
I really enjoyed the iron realization:)

However.. In this stanza.

'If I die, I didn't know what is your reaction,
if you can be happy or sad
but I surely say that your problem died
because I'm the problem that you want to die'

^The wording in this stanza was a little confusing. But if you try too clear it up, it will be a very effective stanza.

You ended this peice with a twist,
I really enjoyed this peice.
Keep writting,
5/5 Elaine.

Being sad means not being emotional..its just the nature of sadness..the flow is right but the usage of words "die" is to much..well i think its part of your poem..but uhm try to use some words to make it sounds more deeper..like instead of "die"
use some words that has the same meaning..

keep it up!