Hey,
im so sorry for your loss, I think its a beautiful poem straight from the heart, with a good flow and rhyming, easy to understand, in other words excellent, 5/5
take care,
stephanie

Wow! I want to thank Hellon and Anonymous for your kind words ... although, this is a fictional poem. I actually wrote this one after one of my sister's ex's brother was murdured. It's an interesting story actually, you see me and my sister where sitting around talking about what had happened and about how horrible it must have been for her ex(he was very close to his brother) ... and I started thinking, what would it be like to be in that situation?! So i sat down and ACTUALLY thought about it, you know, tried to put myself in her ex's shoes ... and I just wrote ... and it turned out beautifully. This poem was probably the hardest I've had to write because it came from somewhere so real and so true, just thinking about what my life would be like without my sister(s) shook me ... it just rocked me to the core; I don't think i've ever cried the way I did when I was writing this poem before, just thinking about it now is making me sick (lol). Anyways, so thats the story of this poem and as always please comment and/or vote to let me know how you feel.

This seems like it came from the heart, it is very touching. it's amazing how you can express your loss through words