by ABake Jul 31, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
It's becoming extremely complicated, |
by Alicja B
Oh wow! |
The rhyming in this piece is good but the flow is little off in some parts. You could use some more metaphors for your emotions. I don't want to offend you in any way, just giving constructive critic. |
Nice poem i love to read it ^_^ 5/5 |
by x Mo x
Aw great poem! It reminds me of something I just went through. You put all that emotion into words! Great job! |
by Mo
Very well done! Amazing that you can write so deeply at such a tender age - its going to serve you well throughout life. |